Recycled Writing || English

We are finally doing Creative Writing! For this period I chose to do Recycled Writing. What I have to do is take a piece of writing from my Blog that I would like to improve. I took one from when I was in primary school the post is called Goodbye Summer, Hello Autumn.
This is my older poem, which has quite a few errors.
Goodbye Summer, Hello Autumn

Goodbye hot, steamy, sunny days. Hello damp, misty weather.

Goodbye hot, sleepless nights. Hello cold, chilly nights.

Goodbye creamy, soft ice-creams. Hello red, juicy apples.

Goodbye swimming in the sea. Hello playing in colorful, crunchy, crispy leaves.

Goodbye hot, sweaty Summer Sports. Hello playful Winter Sports.

Goodbye happy water-fights. Hello funny leaf-fights.

Goodbye messy, slimy, slippery sunblock. Hello skidding, dirty, sloppy mud.

Goodbye helpful sun hats. Hello warm woolly hats.

Goodbye beautiful flowers. Hello withering, cold, dying plants.

Goodbye chilly ice blocks. Hello warm, sweet pumpkin soup.

This is my re-made poem, hopefully there are more improvements compared to the previous one that I made back in March 2016.

Goodbye Summer, Hello Autumn

Farewell warm, sweaty days. Greetings to the cooler, foggy climate.

Bye-bye hot, miserable nights. Welcome colder, chilly afternoons.

Goodbye soft-serve ice creams. Hello juicy, refreshing fruits.

Farewell to swimming in deep paddling pools. Welcome to playing in the colourful leaf mounds.

See you later, active and exhausting Summer Sports. Hello to the exciting, entertaining Winter Sports.

Goodbye cooling water-fights. Hello enticing, playful leaf battles.

Bye, slimy, gross sunblock. Welcome.. equally disgusting.. slippery.. mud.

See-ya, ugly bucket hats. Welcome, warm woolly beanies.

Goodbye stunning and beautiful flowers. Hello withering, dull plants.

Farewell chilly ice blocks. Greetings, sweet and warming pumpkin soup.